Here is a poem I'm working on right now. I posted one earlier, but I have made some changes.
I'm working with screenplays from "Jaws" and "Interview With A Vampire." I threw in Shark in the Dark: Vampires (Night/Dark) Jaws (Shark). You get it, right? I was worried about the idea, but as I get going I learn what I'm doing... I limit myself to the text as it appears in the works, but I substitute "Shark in the Dark" for names. Read it tell me what your thoughts are...
Shark In The Dark
_-Shark! Shark! Shark in the dark!
Shark in the Dark sees things
from a sharks point of view.
Looking out at the onrushing undersea
world at night. HEAR!
Landslide, metabolic sounds,
sounds of the innerspaces rushing forward.
The rare secret noises that certain undersea creatures
share with each other.
Twisted and distorted by the depths.
Ext-
Beach-Night-
Sharks Point of view-
ANOTHER ANGLE—
It is a pleasant moonlit night.
HEAR a number of voices singing.
It sounds like an eastern University’s
Alma Mater. Weepy
Ivy League anthems.
Canaries singing in a cage
and considerable necking activity.
Shark in the Dark looks at the crowd.
A spotlight uncovers a mortal woman.
Ext-
Room-Night-
On a warm Night-
ANGLE LOOKING IN-
Shark in the Dark is dressed
in an old-fashioned suit.
His face appears inhumanly white.
He is a spirit with preternatural flesh.
We hear the scampering toenails
of two cocker spaniels.
A series of police sirens go by.
Ext-
Beach-Night-
Another part of the Beach-
Shark in the Dark finds them,
still, on the beach.
HIS feet tangled in his pants.
HER throat is long and slender.
HER breasts are gorgeous.
Shark in the Dark floats down
on top of her. She is helpless.
Her eyes mist over.
Whatever she feels
makes her open her mouth.
Shark in the Dark stares
with a dreamy expression.
Ext-
Beach-Morning-
Man is Pointing frantically at the sea-
ANGLE ON THE WATERLINE-
Fat Lady is bobbing around.
The bodies of a thief and a whore
float by. Shark in the Dark goes by,
dog paddling along, producing
bizarre underwater vibrations.
More to come...
5 comments:
The Ext- Beach- Stuff looks different on paper than it does in the blog.
The scampering spaniels' toenails made me laugh for some reason - I never considered the view from a shark's perspective before...keep going, I want to know what happens. -Lisa
I love the way the images twist as I read it, each time something different, like watching a shark cut through the water.
These are great. When you explained the idea to me, I had reservations, but seeing them, I think you're on to something.
Thanks. The idea became clear to me after working with the scripts for a while. When I spoke with you I held my own reservations. I will bring some to read next week.
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