Planet of the Consummate Loner

This one is from "Planet of the Apes" and "Taxi Driver" with the Consummate Loner sbstituted for Travis Bickle and Taylor. I feel like I need to include more dialogue.
Anyway...

Planet of the Consummate Loner

Int-
Cabin of a Spaceship-
Close up on Astronaut-

The Consummate Loner
has the smell of sex about him.
A solitary spermatosoan gliding
through the womb of the Universe.
No more than a mote
in the eye of eternity.
He takes a drag off his unfiltered cigarette,
turns to look through one of the portholes
into the astral night.

Ext-
Manhattan side street-
Consummate Loner’s point of view-

Twelve “Horsemen” suddenly emerge
from a large midtown porno theater.
The Consummate Loner is starring in silent fascination.
The CRACKING SOUND of rapid fire pistol shots
fills the musty air. A Gorilla hunter stands over a dead man,
Another Gorilla says, “Smile.”
Young TEENYBOPPERS are dancing.

Shark in the Dark

Here is a poem I'm working on right now. I posted one earlier, but I have made some changes.
I'm working with screenplays from "Jaws" and "Interview With A Vampire." I threw in Shark in the Dark: Vampires (Night/Dark) Jaws (Shark). You get it, right? I was worried about the idea, but as I get going I learn what I'm doing... I limit myself to the text as it appears in the works, but I substitute "Shark in the Dark" for names. Read it tell me what your thoughts are...

Shark In The Dark

_-Shark! Shark! Shark in the dark!


Shark in the Dark sees things
from a sharks point of view.
Looking out at the onrushing undersea
world at night. HEAR!
Landslide, metabolic sounds,
sounds of the innerspaces rushing forward.
The rare secret noises that certain undersea creatures
share with each other.
Twisted and distorted by the depths.

Ext-
Beach-Night-
Sharks Point of view-

ANOTHER ANGLE—
It is a pleasant moonlit night.
HEAR a number of voices singing.
It sounds like an eastern University’s
Alma Mater. Weepy
Ivy League anthems.
Canaries singing in a cage
and considerable necking activity.
Shark in the Dark looks at the crowd.
A spotlight uncovers a mortal woman.

Ext-
Room-Night-
On a warm Night-

ANGLE LOOKING IN-
Shark in the Dark is dressed
in an old-fashioned suit.
His face appears inhumanly white.
He is a spirit with preternatural flesh.
We hear the scampering toenails
of two cocker spaniels.
A series of police sirens go by.

Ext-
Beach-Night-
Another part of the Beach-

Shark in the Dark finds them,
still, on the beach.
HIS feet tangled in his pants.
HER throat is long and slender.
HER breasts are gorgeous.
Shark in the Dark floats down
on top of her. She is helpless.
Her eyes mist over.
Whatever she feels
makes her open her mouth.
Shark in the Dark stares
with a dreamy expression.

Ext-
Beach-Morning-
Man is Pointing frantically at the sea-


ANGLE ON THE WATERLINE-
Fat Lady is bobbing around.
The bodies of a thief and a whore
float by. Shark in the Dark goes by,
dog paddling along, producing
bizarre underwater vibrations.

More to come...